Research proposal
Submission date: 21-Apr-2022 10:10PM (UTC+0200)
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FINAL GRADE
80/100
GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
Much feedback and many suggestions were provided
in the working document, hence fewer in-text
comments
KNOWLEDGE AND UNDERSTANDING (20%) –
14.6% (73%)
tile is missing on the cover page (why?)
Both rather well demonstrated
Well documented (non-mandatory) general
introduction; key terms and aspects addressed;
research problem stated, first part should be more
factual and documented as well like the secondary
part, knowledge gap could be better stated, rationale
indicated briefly; aim should be better articulated,
objectives ordered and a couple more added,
objectives are explained to some extent: The RQ
should be divided into sub-Q; Hs listed ; mostly well
articulated; but not further addressed; but
conceptual framework illustrated (good); knowledge
and understanding also demonstrated well in
extensive literature review, as well as in the
methodological section
APPLICATION OF KNOWLEDGE (30%) – 24.6%
(82%)
Very well applied, literature review is very thorough,
well structured, with numerous thematic subsections;
literature gap is extensively documented: he ext is well
paraphrased in section 2;: the theoretical
framework/model is also well discussed, a table
included; methodological knowledge also well applied
ANALYSIS AND EVALUATION/ORIGINALITY &
CRITICALITY
EVALUATION of
applicable research design, assessment of ethical
(40%) – 32.8% (82%)
some originality and criticality demonstrated;
analysis of research design and application to own
proposed study rather successful – course
materials well utilised, alternatives in research
design evaluated, all layers of the onion addressed
with minor inaccuracies, overall purpose
discussed; sampling and primary target
population (in the incorrect order) well discussed,
more attention should be paid to secondary units
of analysis as secondary data is also crucial to the
topic at hand; survey design addressed to a
certain extent, no so the type of secondary data –
to be improved later;
data analysis methods could be better indicated,
but some idea provided; reliability and validity
separately and very well addressed for this stage
in the project, scope delineated, some
limitations anticipated; ethical issues also rather
comprehensively addressed – the textbook was used
properly
COMMUNICATION AND
PRESENTATION & REFERENCING STYLE (10%) –
8.3% (83%)
Title is missing, on the cover page, appears before
section 1, the topic was discussed extensively with
the lecturer/supervisor; a ver detailed and correct
ToC; word count considerably exceeded, the RP is
very comprehensive, all sections well addressed
(apart from 3.4 – analysis methods) – a stronger
submission than some IPs!, feasibility of the
proposed study established; only secondary data
and analysis could be more comprehensively
addressed; three figures inserted and captioned
(but captions placed above and not below the
figures); minor improvements in the specification
of task in Fig. 3 is required; research project
resources should also be named ; exemplary
questionnaire Qs in Appendix, constructs
identified; references in the required style – well
formatted, generated individually: some minor
lexical and grammatical inaccuracies, the future
tense should be more consistently used when
required
Well done!
Overall mark: (80%) 80.3%
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Comment 1
Research proposal
Why is the title missing?
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S?
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rephrase the heading
Impact of… on…
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very detailed!
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if only one, remove 1
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Oh, title is here!
Move to the cover page
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be more precise and factual
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why not documented with citations?
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so what is the knowledge gap?
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will help
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formulate a proper sentence or two
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‘s
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not precise emough
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comes first
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no other?
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: o
nly one?
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Divide into sub-Qs
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not developed
formulated tentatively
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Express as relationships between two variables at a time
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not and
one independent variable per H
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place figure captions below figures
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Comment 22
so why this info here?
explain the relation to your Hs
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space
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updated sources in this sub-section
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cite here
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& us
e various ways to introduce citations
…state that/claim that/determined that/found out that…
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Comment 28
This goes beyond preliminary literature review!
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good
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good
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rephrase
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address philosophy first
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the most outer layer
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this is philosophy – not approach
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no comma
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no ‘we’
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and the time horizon?
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Start with target population
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no comma
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non ‘we’
use the passive voice
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Why females only?
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will be
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rephrase
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address in more detail
what criteria will be sued here?
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address scales of measurement as well
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not websites
social media – why suitable?
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provide more details!
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both
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will be
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confirm
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Comment 51
This is your weak point
Pay attention in RMIP2
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frequency disctribution
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rephrase
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no, not really
are you sure? on what data?
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will be
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? e
xplain
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provide details – name the tests and their purpose!
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no, this is a reliability test
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address in 3.2
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? n
ot clear
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in what form?
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it’s a research philosophy and not reasoning approach or method of analysis
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address in more detail!
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Did you also mention a pilot study?
Trustworthiness for the qualitative part?
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the questions will not require any
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will not
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good
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will most probably be limited
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ot a sentence
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will be
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meaning?
refer to non-fabrication and non-manipulation of data
Comment 73
use all the course materials, not only the textbook
refer to universal principles of researche in the beginning
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refer also to the UoR ethics form
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Place the caption underneath the figure
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Fig. 3:
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2022
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not gather
conduct, carry out
what about extensive literature review?
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include more action verbs for all the to-dos
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pilot not mentioned above
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delete from
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no, resources are something else
remember from class?
Your respondents, focus group participants, supervisor, tools used for data collection and
analysis, financial resources, etc.
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Comment 83
Did you refer to Appendix in 3.3?
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to be discussed